Friday, December 6, 2013

Soul cleansing



His temple, a basin
where numerous travelers stopped by
to wash away their sins
with tears of repentance
that scald the soul.
The myopic
were obviously repelled
by the dazzle of the faucet.


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This post is in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge - Week Ninety-Seven. The prompt is to pen down 33 words that include the following - basin, myopic, dazzle.

20 comments:

joe2poetry said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

That's interesting. I like your use of the prompt!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Joe2Poetry. Glad you liked it :)

Tempest Nightingale LeTrope said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Where I work they offer the option of hand sanitizer--perhaps in case someone is myopic!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Good... That at least ensures hand sanitization if not soul cleansing. Thanks for reading Tempest Nightingale LeTrope.

momosapien said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

tears of repentance that scald the soul...beautiful!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks momosapien. According to Hinduism, genuine repentance is one thing that can rid one of his sins... Hence that line :)

C.C. said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

I love your use of the word 'scald'--especially interspersed with wash, and basin and the idea of soul cleansing. Such evocative imagery :-)

Tom MacInnes said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Very powerful story. The repentence of Sin, the cleansing of our souls, is an intensely Holy act so the closing line of being dazzled by his faucet is a dynamite way to finish. Well-stated, well-structured work. Thank you for sharing your creative vision with us all. :)

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thank you for your kind words CC. I am so glad you liked it :)

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks a lot for stopping by to read Tom. It's always such a pleasure to read your comment, especially your analytical view of the whole thing. Trust me, it's very encouraging. And it always makes smile :)

darkcirclesetc said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Lovely.
Did you write this with any particular place in mind?

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Nothing particularly in mind actually... Just penned down the words that rushed in :)
Thanks for stopping by to read darkcirclesetc.

Atreyee said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Very beautiful!

Trifecta said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Great response to a very difficult prompt!!

Ivy said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

"... to wash away their sins with tears of repentance that scald the soul."

What a great line. Well done!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Atreyee :)

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks for your encouraging words Trifecta!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Hey Ivy, thanks for your kind words of appreciation :)

trudgingthroughfog said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

This is thought-provoking and very nicely written. I really liked it!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

I'm humbled by your appreciative words Trudgingthroughfog :)
Thank you!