Monday, June 17, 2013

Tug-of-war

The rising decibels of the outside world were no match for the war raging inside her. Slouched on a sofa in one corner of this club, she wondered... To be or not to be. To stay or to leave. To make friends with the blinding darkness or to move on in search of light. To save her remaining sanity and run for life or to hold fast and let the storm pass. Would the storm ever pass? Or would it take away everything in its wake? Her quest for answers only won more questions.

‘Did I get too close for comfort?’, her words seemed to fade away in the deafening noise surrounding them.

He nailed the coffin with a ‘Yes’.

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This post is in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge - Week Eighty-Two.

The prompt is to write a 33-333 words piece using the third definition of the following word:

CLUB

1a : a heavy usually tapering staff especially of wood wielded as a weapon
 b : a stick or bat used to hit a ball in any of various games
 c : something resembling a club
2a : a playing card marked with a stylized figure of a black clover
  b : plural but sing or plural in constr : the suit comprising cards marked with clubs
3a : an association of persons for some common object usually jointly supported and meeting periodically; also : a group identified by some common characteristic  
  b : the meeting place of a club  
  c : an association of persons participating in a plan by which they agree to make regular payments or purchases in order to secure some advantage
  d : nightclub
  e : an athletic association or team
4: club sandwich

24 comments:

windandlaughter said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

loved the last line!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

It's the saddest too. Thanks for reading windandlaughter.

Brian Benoit said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Interesting way of leaving us wondering what exactly happened. My sense is rejection, and the brooding sadness you created was really well done. Nice

MOV said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

ouch! too close pushes him away...

great writing!

best,
MOV

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

@Brian Benoit
Thanks Brian... you are correct about the rejection part of it. I'm glad you liked reading it.

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

@MOV
Yeah MOV, it's sad but true. Too close can push someone away.

robbowrites said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Wow, this was so emotional. I loved the ending! Kate (Trifecta Guest Editor)

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Kate. Emotional seems to be the trend nowadays :)

Thomas Marlowe said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Ouch. Very powerful ending.

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Thomas. Your comment is much appreciated.

Kir said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

it's always like that isn't it? The one person or thing we truly want is the one that is always just out of our grasp.

in such a short piece you brought all the emotions of that to life, and that last line, "nail in coffin" was brilliant and sad.

feeling the need to buy her a martini. ;)


September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Kir. If only martini could solve all the problems of life... Well well! And you are so right about the one most-wanted thing being just out of grasp. Very true.

worksbyclaire said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

So many questions for us too - what went wrong, what did she do? what did he do?

humantriumphant said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

too close can often leave a cold, dark shadow. "Yes."

Draug said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Ooo I like this one. So much said and not said. Great tension in those last two lines of dialogue!

Jo-Anne Teal said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thomas Marlow took my comment, verbatim, so I'll just say - very well done.

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Yep... A lot many unanswered questions for everyone. Thanks for reading worksbyclaire.

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Totally agree humantriumphant.

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Draug. Let's hope the tension ends hereafter :)

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Stealing thoughts huh... You made me laugh Jo-Anne Teal... Thanks :)

kymm said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Could totally relate to the feeling of being trapped/trapping oneself.
Rejection seems to be a theme with "club"...
Great piece!

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Thanks Kymm. We all are trapped in life, in some way or the other.

Björn said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Yes indeed... but better to stop before it started

September Dreams said... Best Blogger Tips[Reply to comment]Best Blogger Templates

Totally agree Björn. Nip it in the bud, as they say.