Gurgling in stomach
As he ripped open her abdomen,
Eyes greedily savoring its contents.
Blop went into jars
Liver, kidneys, pancreas.
His tongue ached to get in.
"Congratulations on your first autopsy doc!"
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This post is in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge - Week Sixty-Seven. The prompt is to write 33 words (exactly) that include among them at least one example of onomatopoeia.
As he ripped open her abdomen,
Eyes greedily savoring its contents.
Blop went into jars
Liver, kidneys, pancreas.
His tongue ached to get in.
"Congratulations on your first autopsy doc!"
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This post is in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge - Week Sixty-Seven. The prompt is to write 33 words (exactly) that include among them at least one example of onomatopoeia.
26 comments:
Suddenly, I'm not so interested in lunch...
Graphic but interesting take on this week's prompt!
Have you been watching HANNIBAL? ;)
I love when you (and others) write like this. It is not like me to bring forth these images, but I do love when you do and I can read them, (33 at a time).
it was so well done.
TGIF
Ew, gross! My stomach just did a double flip, I think.
lol - now, that was side-splitting funny!
Woah... Gross. :P
(And that's a compliment! Good job on this evocative piece.)
ya that got the message across.
Thanks Nenna.
I hope you did have lunch after all :)
Thanks for your encouraging words Kir :)
And no, I haven't seen Hannibal... It kinda gives me the creeps to watch even the trailor... Lol
Well...'twas meant to be.. Hehehe.
Wow... That's a different take on this :)
Yeah... The first time for me too for taking 'gross' as a compliment :)
Thanks. Am glad you liked it.
Thanks Sam. I hope you enjoyed it.
This is a great bloody one!
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
So wait...does he want to eat her? xD Is he a cannibal in disguise??? Disgustingly awesome.
I'm not sure this guy is in the right job. A gruesome tale, well told.
Yes indeed. You got it right :)
Thanks for your appreciation Draug :p
Thanks for your comment. I hope you enjoyed reading this post.
Ha! This brings in all the senses. I can hear it, see it but thankfully not taste it! :D
Ha!ha!Just loved this wicked Doc-greedy to taste,is he?Interesting take & just what I love :D
Yikes! Great use of onomatopoeia!
This either heightens or deadens the appetite, depending on the person... Gory and good.
Thanks for linking up!
Not that any of us would want to... Lol...
Hope you liked it Linda.
Thanks Atreyee. You said it just right... Wicked Doc! ;)
Hahaha... Loved ur expression Suzanne. Thank you :)
Whoa.. I guess it's killed the appetite of many around ;)
Thanks for your comment.
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